Thursday, July 30, 2009

Dejected to the Core - 3WW CXLVIII (darkness, patronize, weaken)

At times the darkness
patronized her mind
her weakened judgement
tantalized by time

Mythic gods of anger
in darkness and in light
attempt the soar of angels
disguised in fancied flight

Come down the weakened staircase
inside chronicles of lore
Her mind is lost in darkness
and dejected to the core

11 comments:

Radio Nowhere said...

Spiffy rhymes, my friend, spiffy rhymes...

Larry McCay said...

Thank you - Radio Somewhere.

Radio Nowhere said...

LOL! Larry, my name is Mark. I saw your link on the ReadWritePoem Prompt entry, so I read your work.

I'm not able to leave my name on URL on your blog due to your settings. So, you can visit http://radio-nowhere/org/nb/ sometime.

RN

Larry McCay said...

I changed the settings - hopefully correctly.

Mark said...

Ah!

I hope you didn't think I was complaining...I have the Google ID for this and other situations.

But thanks. And I did enjoy your great rhymes. I have tough time with rhymes.

Larry McCay said...

No worries - I thought that I noticed something strange about that earlier.

I figured that you mentioned it because you expected to be able to - and that others would too.

Thanks for the words - I'm just getting into this again - not sure if it is quite working or not.

:-)

Tumblewords: said...

Ah, this is nicely worded, has lovely flow and rhythm!

Thom Gabrukiewicz said...

ally like the flow of this, teh strength of voice.

when the musics over said...

I thought I posted from my iphone the other day but it's not here!

I think I said I found this to be very lyrical. I liked it!

Summer's half gone, Larry. We have to get together soon!

Larry McCay said...

Thanks guys!

Yeah Mike - I plan on getting back down to the boat soon.

This summer is getting away too fast.

Our vacation was really nice but jam packed. I wanted to catch up with you and Smarrito this year down there. No time.

Bobbie said...

This is nice. Love the flow and the rhymes. :)