And the litheness of her body
helps lift her to the heavens
transcends her earthly binding
as the grave of life offends
The scent of earthly rigor
hangs deep within her mind
and stretches past the flicker
of bonfires left behind
Stranded on sullen highway
with sunburst fired chalice
there's no place left to stray
she scorched the propped-up palace
While tracing stardust questions
the sisters cross the room
and stare at frozen memories
in the straw of fresh cut broom
8 comments:
I love the sound of "stardust questions"!
Really nice flow in this one, and just some killer lines. Well done.
With Thom - especially liked "she scorched the propped up palace"
I love the emotion of the first stanza, "as the grave of life offends". Full of irony in that image. This is full of great phrases. I love the resolve "in the straw of fresh cut broom". It leaves an incensed aroma behind. Nice one, Larry.
powerful I liked the sound of it the way it bounces alsong was delightful reading. I look forward to reading more of your 3www stuff.
The Ballerina
Very good. A very strong piece.
I so enjoyed this! Thanks!
Yes I agree with the above, choice phrasing and awesome flow!
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